tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post5352491961185836223..comments2023-12-20T05:59:21.610-05:00Comments on Black-Eyed Susan's: Like a Rabid Dogsusanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14924982664582970754noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-55520822364119624382008-09-16T17:10:00.000-04:002008-09-16T17:10:00.000-04:00Rebecca,My aunt recounted this to me. My young unc...Rebecca,<BR/>My aunt recounted this to me. My young uncle, whom I worshipped as a child, overdosed on crack in the 90s. The scene as she described it to me, stayed with me. The crack epidemic was prevalent in my community. If AIDS wasn't snatching away our loved ones, crack was. <BR/><BR/>I previously stated <I>if I revised</I> but I'm certain, I'll be revisiting this. I just don't know when. susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14924982664582970754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-59711014876374247402008-09-16T16:29:00.000-04:002008-09-16T16:29:00.000-04:00pretty powerful write and it must have been someth...pretty powerful write and it must have been something quite intense to witness.rebeccahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18248554235709475320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-52131946780547638372008-09-11T18:19:00.000-04:002008-09-11T18:19:00.000-04:00Wonderful stuff surrounding a difficult topic. Gr...Wonderful stuff surrounding a difficult topic. Great job.Kimberleehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17787970553045999626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-28167567219175530672008-09-11T02:38:00.000-04:002008-09-11T02:38:00.000-04:00What they said, especially the lilt of the repetit...What they said, especially the lilt of the repetition. It's the sad story of us, humans, and brings to mind one of Jo's recent poems about riding in the tube.<BR/><BR/>Yeah, you're back alright.Rethabilehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03523368313680103826noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-52035904571276660942008-09-09T19:55:00.000-04:002008-09-09T19:55:00.000-04:00I like the rythm, the repetition... I remeber bein...I like the rythm, the repetition... I remeber being there.Anahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06611955404994410354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-49403648362692656332008-09-09T15:44:00.000-04:002008-09-09T15:44:00.000-04:00The accuracy of the stone count is somehow just as...The accuracy of the stone count is somehow just as dealy important as the skewer of his limbs and yowl of his voice. Very good.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-4182822159882959412008-09-09T11:36:00.000-04:002008-09-09T11:36:00.000-04:00Great! Made me hurt. You're back in full force, an...Great! Made me hurt. You're back in full force, and then some.<BR/><BR/>Thanks for your comments on my piece. I'll let you know if I go beack to it!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-55024297702670770012008-09-09T11:21:00.000-04:002008-09-09T11:21:00.000-04:00Ditto with the comment from Nathan...Oh my- this p...Ditto with the comment from Nathan...<BR/>Oh my- this poem just strikes at the heart... words like 'watching' and 'staring', 'stood by'- surrounded by people and still dying alone...<BR/>Very powerful, Susan.Reginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14287107184977896696noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-50811961286488359342008-09-09T09:11:00.000-04:002008-09-09T09:11:00.000-04:00i agree with nathan ... the repetition makes this ...i agree with nathan ... the repetition makes this piece. the temptation in a piece like this (at least for me) is to do some preaching in it or infuse some blatant social commentary. you stopped short of that and instead, repeated some of the lines. it was the perfect way to get this across!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-7423768227465417402008-09-09T06:05:00.000-04:002008-09-09T06:05:00.000-04:00This is a chilling write......really engages the r...This is a chilling write......really engages the reader, my mind is now busy spinning the backstory. I agree with Nathan, the repetition is very effective.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-65029738878943927232008-09-09T06:04:00.000-04:002008-09-09T06:04:00.000-04:00You bring out our fascination with such things in ...You bring out our fascination with such things in this.anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-20510835694411915342008-09-09T03:56:00.000-04:002008-09-09T03:56:00.000-04:00The repetition reinforces the startling power of t...The repetition reinforces the startling power of this poem. A well-crafted piece.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-69853025638263190652008-09-09T01:58:00.000-04:002008-09-09T01:58:00.000-04:00spare and powerful. i could feel their watching, ...spare and powerful. i could feel their watching, just watching eyes.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com