tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post5682316711814533588..comments2023-12-20T05:59:21.610-05:00Comments on Black-Eyed Susan's: haikususanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14924982664582970754noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-39192191345490950882008-02-03T08:17:00.000-05:002008-02-03T08:17:00.000-05:00you've captured the softness & child-like joy in s...you've captured the softness & child-like joy in snow so beautifully!qualcosa di bellohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15107076097533430296noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-91929723472093612802008-02-01T19:06:00.000-05:002008-02-01T19:06:00.000-05:00I like the first two lines. And I think that some...I like the first two lines. And I think that some more lines would be good. The term "winter wonder" made me think of winter wonderland in an amusement park and I'm not sure if that is what you intended!Annahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04660551089821141019noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-81121476010038194462008-02-01T11:14:00.000-05:002008-02-01T11:14:00.000-05:00Hi Pearl,I chose "frigid" because it more accurate...Hi Pearl,<BR/><BR/>I chose "frigid" because it more accurately conveys something stronger and different than cold connotes. I used "against" not solely for count but meaning. I wanted to convey friction. It is easy to get stuck on 5-7-5. Please let me know if my rationale doesn't work.<BR/><BR/>I appreciate you taking time to read and comment.susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14924982664582970754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-38595985051424071872008-02-01T10:48:00.000-05:002008-02-01T10:48:00.000-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14924982664582970754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-88403795617164952272008-02-01T10:40:00.000-05:002008-02-01T10:40:00.000-05:00you want 5-7-5 convention but do you need "against...you want 5-7-5 convention but do you need "against"do you think cold instead of frigid would be too much C?<BR/><BR/>Winter wonder globes<BR/>nice close to the poem.Pearlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05251168248457758117noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-37076396369169297742008-01-31T14:36:00.000-05:002008-01-31T14:36:00.000-05:00I live in the South, where trees and plants don't ...I live in the South, where trees and plants don't always lose their leaves. When I read your haiku, I imagine dried out cotton orbs, with withered stems, and measley patches of snow. Winter has its own stark beauty, but it's not the finest time of year where I live.<BR/><BR/>I'd love to see winter wonder globes!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-45950980744326023902008-01-31T14:32:00.000-05:002008-01-31T14:32:00.000-05:00Seems to capture it perfectly, nice and crunchy, t...Seems to capture it perfectly, nice and crunchy, too. <BR/><BR/>Hi by the way :) I'm Ario and am in your new poetswhoblog circle thingy. <BR/><BR/>You have some great pieces on here. I look forward to reading more.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-8793921571416535282008-01-31T05:44:00.000-05:002008-01-31T05:44:00.000-05:00excellent fresh imagery!excellent fresh imagery!Crafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-51813522789139277742008-01-30T19:07:00.000-05:002008-01-30T19:07:00.000-05:00Mmm, nice imagery.Mmm, nice imagery.Nancy Bea Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04833697697334243593noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-56119958608859265652008-01-30T16:28:00.000-05:002008-01-30T16:28:00.000-05:00Thanks for reading my villanelle and commenting ab...Thanks for reading my villanelle and commenting about "ho." I have to agree with you. This is why I really hate rhyming; it seems like I'll use any word just to get it to rhyme. It was out of character.<BR/><BR/>You are so smart to keep the lines of communication open with your daughter! I'd say that is one of the most important aspects of parenting.Linda Jacobshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14459940700516084069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-65654874872159918582008-01-30T14:32:00.000-05:002008-01-30T14:32:00.000-05:00i loved the line...branches brush against the sky....i loved the line...branches brush against the sky....little wing writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16010376737431344381noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-11319841626619510712008-01-30T13:45:00.000-05:002008-01-30T13:45:00.000-05:00'winter wonder globes'...liked that much'winter wonder globes'...liked that muchAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-63194630228086602492008-01-30T12:40:00.000-05:002008-01-30T12:40:00.000-05:00winter encase in a snow globe - wonderful imagewinter encase in a snow globe - wonderful imagelissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00706027242022517570noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-273369570103728982008-01-30T12:34:00.000-05:002008-01-30T12:34:00.000-05:00It is amazing how close the vast blue sky seems in...It is amazing how close the vast blue sky seems in the light of winter. Beautiful, Susan. Thanks.SandyCarlsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752798823532580733noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-78975756129111681862008-01-30T11:45:00.000-05:002008-01-30T11:45:00.000-05:00No shaking!Great image.No shaking!<BR/>Great image.spacedlawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12462723005560128474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8400455429821166661.post-1232868757593520762008-01-30T10:46:00.000-05:002008-01-30T10:46:00.000-05:00i love snow globes... what a brilliant analogy!!!!...i love snow globes... what a brilliant analogy!!!!paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.com