Wednesday, April 1, 2009

Cherry-popped #999

They fall hard. I wouldn't call what happens with Cherry a crush. Nah, it's called a smack-down (you know, make you see stars kind of thing); a sap is sucked in and he doesn't stand a chance. Cherry's got it like that, a knack for making guys lose their ever freakin' simple minds. What's worse, she really doesn't do much. Well, unless you count smiling. Her smile is fatal. I'm talking lethal injection. And the guys- nothing varied about them and the outcome is always the same.

A guy comes in the Blue Light, orders a beer or a shot, hell occassionally, one even orders a glass of wine. Before he orders his second round, Cherry has worked her magic. She smiles and makes the guy believe he is special when he isn't. By the time her shift ends, he's professing his love eternal. She, on the other hand, is scooping up his keys and thinking about her trip to the Daisy Mall in the morning while he sleeps off his trip to Paradise.

It's 2 A.M. and Cherry just popped #999.

*Every week, Thom posts 3 words for us to work our magic. To read more go here.

10 comments:

anthonynorth said...

Nicely done. Quite a girl, there.

ThomG said...

I love this. Really good flow, great description. Sly, playful, but on a razor-edge of darkness. Well done, Susan.

Ofira Sephiroth said...

Nicely written. You left a comment on my blog about the "Varied eyes" line used in my poem..it basically just means that various types of men excite me.

gigidiaz said...

I like it!! I'm actually in the middle of writing something about a similar girl; except I'm too scared/selfish to share it. Maybe, since you have a character like mine, I'll share it with you when it's done!

Thanks for stopping by and happy 3WW

susan said...

Hi gigi, be bold! And if you don't, drop me an e-mail. :-)

susan said...

Hi gigi, be bold! And if you don't, drop me an e-mail. :-)

cupcakewitch said...

Awesome! I want to hear more!

bunnygirl said...

Very well done! The voice is edgy without being OTT, and as unlikely a gal as Cherry is, I believe.

MichaelO said...

Sap-suckers for a pretty face. We men are a sorry lot.

;>)

susan said...

Marie, I might write more but you'd have to egg me on. Thom is my current muse. He has a wicked sense of humor.

Ann, I didn't think about writing fiction until joining 3ww. Now, I really enjoy it. Cherry is cool, manipulative, but cool.

Michael, we all have our weakness. My weakness is very boy, opinionated, literate, sports watchin, lick-my-face kinda of guy. I was quite knobbly knee when we met. :-)