Saturday, April 25, 2009

I'm Having Your Baby- 3ww continued

Continued...

Before his next shift, Krell went to see a certain general to call in a very large chip. Being a night guard had its perks. Having caught said general rolling around in the bush with a fellow general, Krell was sure the general would do all he could to avoid a nasty divorce and public scandal. Krell explained to the general that he needed an honorable discharge immediately. Say it was due to medical or whatever credible reason he had to, but he needed it done now.

And here he sat, finishing out his last night of duty. He sighed heavily, wondering how had his life spiraled out of control. Sure, he wanted more, wanted differently. Two ebolutions ago when he had signed his enlistment papers for required military service, he knew this wasn’t the life he wanted. He didn’t want to be the contracted male of a female who was obligated to care for him and their offspring. He didn’t want the very beige, suburban life that his parents had willingly accepted.

That restlessness in the pit of stomach is what had led him to the rebels in the first place. While he still didn’t hold the same romantic notions they held, he knew he didn’t want the traditional life either. Despite how it happened, this was Krell’s opportunity to choose his own path. He laughed, “Why is my life playing out like a bad b-rated reel?”

He didn’t know why, but he felt Trekia would come tonight. This whole confidence and assurance was new. Everything was new. Like how with little provocation he could go off on a tirade or break down into a crying fit. These emotional swings were worse than his premenstrual symptoms and before now, he didn’t think anything could be worse than emotional deviant he became during his cycle.

He needed to see Trekia. He owed her an apology. While he had no desire to be contracted, he did care for her. He wanted to tell her about his decision to have their offspring; that he was leaving soon for the commune outside the city. He wanted her to know that if she still wanted him, she could find him there and together they’d decide if they wanted to spend their lives together. He’d tell her he wanted a partner, not a mother figure demanding to be obeyed. He would not be anyone’s underling. Either they were equals or they were nothing.

"Krell?"

"Trekia"

"We need to talk."

Each week at 3WW, Thom posts 3 words. This week's words are quarrel, opportunity and service. Then we have at it. This is the conclusion of a three part story. To read more entries, go here.

12 comments:

ThomG said...

OK, I'm not a clicky guy. Beat me over the head.

Again, I'll say it again...you've managed to transpose a human trait onto other-worldly beings. And you did it with class and style.

susan said...

Thom, you're really kind. The truth is, I want to write as well as you. You're the writer.

Witchmojo said...

I'm enjoying this story. Love the turn around and the way the characters are developing.

susan said...

Hi Witchmojo,

I'm not sure when or if I'll revisit Krell and Trekia. You have me considering it now.

Witchmojo said...

*Sits up and begs* Please? Pretty please?

Seriously, I'd love to read more.

susan said...

ROTFLMAO

Kind of hard to refuse a request like that. :-)

Amy said...

While I understand the desire for us to want more of the story (and reading the upcoming conversation would be intersting)- I can see the potential for leaving the story at where it ends. If you re-visit them, I'd read it :)

Lucy said...

Wow! YOU are a writer Sue!
great story and I love Krell!
I wouldn't dare critique such an imaginative piece!

susan said...

Hi Lucy, Thanks for coming by.I attended school forever. Developed very thick skin and I'd like to think I have enough humility to use feedback to help me improve my writing.

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

An alternate world always has certain charms. You should definitely continue with this if you're having a good time.

christine said...

It seems like you're writing a novel here. Why stop now? You're on a roll. I'd like to know how Krell takes the whole birthing part of it...

susan said...

Hi Christine,
Ah, another request. I suppose I could. I take my inspiration from past reads or movies and let my imagination take me wherever. I suppose I could continue to be led. Thanks.