Wednesday, May 6, 2009

3WW

I'd Bleed For You

Flash like a fine blade maligns cleanly.
Red beads stain the flesh before the cut is felt;
bleeding isn’t cryptic.

*Every Wednesday, Thom gives us three words. This week I opted for poetry. This week's words: cryptic, flash and malign. Find more contributions here.

16 comments:

Amarettogirl said...

oooh this is so dark and mysterious-- what a powerful, little arrangement and powerful concise story! That middle line is out of this world good! Love it!

susan said...

Thank you amarettogirl.

ThomG said...

Love the image of the little beads of blood that always come before the hurt. Everyone knows the feeling, and seeing it written gave me chills.

Succinct piece of poetry here.

susan said...

Thanks, Thom. I'll be shortly.

Hal Johnson said...

I had much the same reaction to that middle line. It gave me goosebumps.

Andy Sewina said...

tHIS GIVES ME THE SHIVERS!
Very nicely written!!

b said...

This required a look and then another. A deeper meaning for "red beads stain the flesh before the cut is felt". I will think on that for a few days.

Well done.

b

Tumblewords: said...

Nice work - chilling truths...

floreta said...

not cryptic at all. it's pretty clear!

pjd said...

This is about getting feedback on a piece of writing.

Or perhaps the "new economy" aspect of red ink causing cuts in headcount.

So many possible landings for this metaphor. For metaphor the whole poem must be if the flash is "like" a fine blade rather than "of" a fine blade.

Strong, this is. Very tight.

anthonynorth said...

Deep, dark and delectable.

tea said...

You're poetry makes me think. You write so much in a few lines.

Mojo said...

Very clean. I liked that. It should have felt dark and claustrophobic but, to me at least, it was like watching a surgeon with a scalpel under a brilliant light.

susan said...

Thank you all. You see more than I do. I read a piece about flash fiction and it inspired this. I think we underestimate how much of what we write bubbles to the surface so it's important that we're always reading, listening and observing.

Angel said...

Powerful piece.

one more believer said...

i loved the economy of scene and words that splash against my optical senses!!!