Wednesday, January 23, 2008

american sentence

Here's my contribution to 3WW. An American Sentence


All sense scattered; his warm breath against my nape promised tomorrow.

19 comments:

pjd said...

It's interesting that quite a few of us took a bleak approach to the three words, but others took a breathless anticipation approach.

I like the choice of "against" instead of "on".

paisley said...

awwwwww.. you give me goose bumps just thinking about it... beautiful....

pia said...

wow--you went against the grain or way people seem to be going--and it was wonderful

TC said...

I'm torn between thinking "Oh sweet" and wondering about vampires, lol.

Nice.

mariacristina said...

Hmmm, sounds like a nice connection.

watermaid said...

Good to see these three words being used to promise something good rather than relate something dark or sad.

Sherry said...

Very sensual!!!

tumblewords said...

nice line of promise and warmth!

Sandy said...

You are right, Susan about our poems...I really like yours...very well done.

S

Herb Urban said...

Very sensual sentence. It's reads like poetic foreplay. Nice.

Kate said...

I am with pjd... I read so many 3ww's tonight that were about people scorned... Yours was about anticipation! I love it!

Ingrid said...

This was great, Susan. I could almost feel the electricity.

Heather Kathleen said...

i agree susan, played to the sensual side. one sentence that said so much. :)

gautami tripathy said...

This plays on the sensuality...

if tomorrow comes

Corina said...

A very nice one! This could start a whole new story!

LittleWing said...

ummmm, love....yummy...thank you...it is a wonderful feeling we can all relate to...

writerwoman said...

Wow. Romantic and a real story in one sentence. I could picture that scene.

Marcia (MeeAugraphie) said...

"...Promised tomorrow.". Wonderful sentence.

susan said...

Thank you all.