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Wednesday, January 23, 2008

american sentence

Here's my contribution to 3WW. An American Sentence


All sense scattered; his warm breath against my nape promised tomorrow.

19 comments:

PJD said...

It's interesting that quite a few of us took a bleak approach to the three words, but others took a breathless anticipation approach.

I like the choice of "against" instead of "on".

paisley said...

awwwwww.. you give me goose bumps just thinking about it... beautiful....

Anonymous said...

wow--you went against the grain or way people seem to be going--and it was wonderful

TC said...

I'm torn between thinking "Oh sweet" and wondering about vampires, lol.

Nice.

Anonymous said...

Hmmm, sounds like a nice connection.

Anonymous said...

Good to see these three words being used to promise something good rather than relate something dark or sad.

Sherry said...

Very sensual!!!

Tumblewords: said...

nice line of promise and warmth!

Anonymous said...

You are right, Susan about our poems...I really like yours...very well done.

S

Beau Brackish said...

Very sensual sentence. It's reads like poetic foreplay. Nice.

Helene said...

I am with pjd... I read so many 3ww's tonight that were about people scorned... Yours was about anticipation! I love it!

Boricua in Texas said...

This was great, Susan. I could almost feel the electricity.

a mouthy irish woman? ridiculous! said...

i agree susan, played to the sensual side. one sentence that said so much. :)

Anonymous said...

This plays on the sensuality...

if tomorrow comes

Anonymous said...

A very nice one! This could start a whole new story!

little wing writer said...

ummmm, love....yummy...thank you...it is a wonderful feeling we can all relate to...

writerwoman said...

Wow. Romantic and a real story in one sentence. I could picture that scene.

Anonymous said...

"...Promised tomorrow.". Wonderful sentence.

susan said...

Thank you all.