Books & Other Passions
i love snow globes... what a brilliant analogy!!!!
No shaking!Great image.
It is amazing how close the vast blue sky seems in the light of winter. Beautiful, Susan. Thanks.
winter encase in a snow globe - wonderful image
'winter wonder globes'...liked that much
i loved the line...branches brush against the sky....
Thanks for reading my villanelle and commenting about "ho." I have to agree with you. This is why I really hate rhyming; it seems like I'll use any word just to get it to rhyme. It was out of character.You are so smart to keep the lines of communication open with your daughter! I'd say that is one of the most important aspects of parenting.
Mmm, nice imagery.
excellent fresh imagery!
Seems to capture it perfectly, nice and crunchy, too. Hi by the way :) I'm Ario and am in your new poetswhoblog circle thingy. You have some great pieces on here. I look forward to reading more.
I live in the South, where trees and plants don't always lose their leaves. When I read your haiku, I imagine dried out cotton orbs, with withered stems, and measley patches of snow. Winter has its own stark beauty, but it's not the finest time of year where I live.I'd love to see winter wonder globes!
you want 5-7-5 convention but do you need "against"do you think cold instead of frigid would be too much C?Winter wonder globesnice close to the poem.
Hi Pearl,I chose "frigid" because it more accurately conveys something stronger and different than cold connotes. I used "against" not solely for count but meaning. I wanted to convey friction. It is easy to get stuck on 5-7-5. Please let me know if my rationale doesn't work.I appreciate you taking time to read and comment.
I like the first two lines. And I think that some more lines would be good. The term "winter wonder" made me think of winter wonderland in an amusement park and I'm not sure if that is what you intended!
you've captured the softness & child-like joy in snow so beautifully!
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