Wednesday, October 14, 2009

Pouty, Perfect Lips

Billie smiled at the poor schmuck sitting at my bar. Of course he flushed redder than the shade on her pouty, perfect lips. Damn, her. Even her smile was indecent. If you saw Billie, you’d understand. She took great pleasure knowing how frustrated guys became around her.

In all fairness, Billie is no siren. She’s just your ungodly, curved in-all-the-right-places gal with hair thick as a mare’s mane and legs almost equally as long. When Billie walks into the room, all men instantly revert to prepubescent boys, clumsy and tongue-tied.

I’m the only one immune to her charms. I grew up with Billie when she was my little brother.


Thom host 3WW. This week's words: frustrate, indecent, understand. Not happy with my title. Any suggestions? Read more entries here.

16 comments:

Lorin said...

I haven't seen this meme before. Very cool meme and very cool story!

susan said...

Thanks Lorin,

I haven't participated in a long time. Thom is a very cool guy.

ThomG said...

SA-WEET! Oh, man, L, you just nailed this. Nailed it. I enjoyed this so, so much.

As far as a new title, what about Curveballs?

Oh, man. Loved. It.

Ana said...

p(o)urrrfect! That last sentence turns it all upside down - you got to re-read it from the start.

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cricket51 said...

LOL - good one, never saw it coming!

mark said...

I love this. That *ahem* curve ball at the end was outstanding. Spot on...

You so nailed this.

anthonynorth said...

A perfect story. Loved the ending.

gautami tripathy said...

Like that very much!

commas and all

Tumblewords: said...

Perfect!

susan said...

Thank you all for taking time to read and comment.

There some pretty ugly slurs made against transgendered women and often it refers to genitalia so I'm not comfortable with the suggestion, Thom. Some would twist it into something ugly even though I know you meant no offense.

mayra lazara dole said...

FANtastic. this meme looks like so much fun. i wish i had found it earlier but have been too busy... did Thom or Susan write this short piece? masterful writing & well crafted. really enjoyed it.

Color Online said...

Mayra, I wrote it. A friend has been persistently nudging me. lol

-S

~willow~ said...

Lovely! I love being surprised, and boy was I ever! :D

swapna said...

Clever twist...never realised it coming.One word and you did the trick. Enjoyed reading it.

PS : De-abbreviate as you like ;) said...

one of the best i read ds time !!