Thursday, March 19, 2009

3WW & TOP

Rite of Passage

When she sucks her teeth and rolls her eyes,
I weigh my options: give in to that ubiquitious
urge and snatch her up by her whirling dervish neck
or bear down, refocus and restrain that natural
desire to curse her and the universe for the burden
of having given birth.


Submitting this for both 3WW and TOP.

25 comments:

anthonynorth said...

An excellent surprise at the end there.

Pretty Me!! said...

i wanted to laugh !! nice use of words :)

Thinking Aloud said...

Sound like something that I might use in my Chronicles of Cameron, somewhwere around day 12:)

Love it!

Jacqueline said...

Strong emotion here, I can so completely relate. Succinctly put.

susan said...

Hi Pretty, I was hoping it would make someone laugh. I know a few moms as we like to say, can identify. lol

susan said...

T, is Cameron your daughter? :-)

Amias said...

I am feeling you here Susan .. yes, I did laugh, but you know the truth is funny.

ThomG said...

Brought a smile to my face. Good stuff.

bunnygirl said...

Nicely done, and so short! I'm envious, since I have to always fight the desire to ramble.

Thinking Aloud said...

Yes, Cameron is my 15 year old. She lives in New York City with her father.

Claudia said...

Really enjoyed reading this - as a lover of poetry AND as a mom. I think I'm going to start participating in the TOP. It is so creative and looks like a lot of fun.

Tumblewords: said...

Universality in this one, without doubt!

gautami tripathy said...

Loved the way it ended..

holding on

susan said...

Thanks all. Claudia, TOP is fun.

Jay said...

Short and to the point! I like it!

SpeaksofRivers said...

Ahh teenagers. Glad I'm not one any more. Used to teach teen bible study-never again.

Angel said...

Cool way to use the words.

Jeeves said...

Nice ending and use of words.

Sepiru Chris said...

Susan,

I just sprayed tea on my screen; note to self, do not sip whilst reading B.E.S.

Great laugh.

Tschuess,
Chris

Sepiru Chris said...

(wet screen, though, and, fortunately, the keyboard still works.)

Heather said...

Oh, yes. Definitely can relate. lol What a creative use of these words!

Linda Jacobs said...

Oh, I like this! I've been there many times! You express the frustrations of parenthood so well!

susan said...

Glad you all laughed with me. Just spent the afternoon with my youngest. Today was a good day. Today she cracked me up.

Gordon Mason said...

With feeling! I like the sound and movement in the first line. And the "re" words which emphasise it is not for the first time.

susan said...

Hi Gordon, thanks for weighing in. I need to get by your place and comment. Looking forward to reading what you're up to.