Monday, September 1, 2008

spectale

yanked from sun to hail
proud feathers scatter by fistful
naked bird wails




*late responding to a prompt listed at One Single Impression

30 comments:

JP/deb said...

i feel pulled in by this poem ... exquisite. JP/deb

Edward S Gault said...

Excellent poem-Thank You.

fourwindshaiga said...

Another kind of spectacle. Good haiku.

barbs.haiku said...

Oh dear, the poor bird!

Jim said...

Hi Susan, I am wondering about these poor little birds. Were they in an oil spill?
I hope they aren't being boiled alive. Or is it a bird fight, or a baby crying while his moma is being eaten.
..

gautami tripathy said...

Painful image...

hurtled against edge of eon

SandyCarlson said...

Ouch. What a powerful poem. Thanks.

zoya gautam said...

.."yanked from sun to hail"_tragic..
for posting this many thanks..

susan said...

Thank you all. For me, the poem is a metaphor.

Pam said...

The powerful pull of this small poem is amazing. Great work!

texasblu said...

Very tragic. Or dear.. someone else used that word. Still, it is what I thought. Powerful images that can mean so much more.

Jade said...

ouch!
your description tho. is heavenly.

Jade said...

hmmm... a metaphor, for your life
now? someone stripping you
naked, or exposing you?

...deb said...

So nice to read you again. So *good* to read you again.

Vibrant. Loved the missed spelling.

Beth said...

ow
do they
will they
grow again?

lovely expression, Susan

Crafty Green Poet said...

poor bird, it does make the reader wonder what happened...

anthonynorth said...

Small, but certainly mighty.

me ann my camera said...

Nature's fury can change our lives,or those around us in an instant. The reading of this today is very timely considering Gustav's behavior over the holiday weekend.

Nathan said...

Great work. Love the last line especially.

Patois said...

A brilliant ku, but so damn painful to think about.

durablepigments said...

"yanked from sun to hail..." Such an intriguing piece; so much mystery behind it!

tumblewords said...

What a spectacle! Good work! I recently saw a hummingbird without tail feathers.

christine said...

You sure pack a lot into the moment. The images create a big impact, so much wildness in the span of three lines.

spacedlaw said...

I feel for the poor bird, which is made a spectacle of.

Annamari said...

Exquisite....Exquisite.
I have a friend that went to Greece on an archeology scholarship. She told me about the pomegranate.

one more believer said...

it is hard to imagine a more painful image... so beautifully portrayed...

anthonynorth said...

I enjoyed that. A very clever metaphor.

Greyscale Territory said...

Thatword "yanked" is an eye-opening beginning! Powerful poem!

teric said...

Oh, that would be a spectacle! but a sad one for sure.

susan said...

Thank you all for coming by and commenting.